Crit on "Wanted"
* My villain is very villainous (even likable in a villainous sort of way), but needs more specific motivation. I agree with this, and am going to emphasize the power rush he gets from his schemes. A prologue I am planning will also show this power hunger.
* My hero / heroine are role-reversed. The guy is the "damsel in distress" and the girl is Princess Charming come to save him. This is I did on purpose, probably influenced by my fandom of the X-Files, BTW. Anyway, she pointed out that there are a couple of times where I put them in traditional gender roles, and give them traditional sappy gender emotions (my interpretation, not her words) -- I need to tighten these spots so they are consistent characters.
* This guy, whom I portray as an average fella, has not one but two hotties falling for him in the course of this novel -- can you say "wish fulfillment?" So I need to explain why this is happening. I agree with this to a point, but this is coming from a female POV, so I need to take it seriously. I need to show him as the Ugly Duckling maybe, coming into his own . . . in the novel, he becomes more confident, maybe that helps, I don't know.
* My reader found the ending ambiguous -- she did not know the final fate of the male lead -- did he die or not? Now I had one specific ending in mind, and obviously I failed to clearly convey that, but maybe the ambiguity works, I don't know. I have to think about this one.
Those were the main concerns, and it gives me some things to think about. One more crit to come in, I hope in October.